Self and peer assessment
Five Forks School – Self-assessment and target setting
in writing
Background
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process | Student samples – Jason, Shane,
Nicola
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Student samples – Jason, year 6
Jason completed a planning template for his pre-test writing task called My Hut. Following the teaching process he completed two subsequent pieces of writing called My Bike and The Possum. At the end of the teaching process Jason reflected on his writing.
Each writing example includes a completed self-assessment form.
Pre-test writing task – My Hut
View the planning template
Transcript of My Hut
One day when I was lying in a hammock in the shade my neighbour turned the stero on.
I really really wanted her to be quiet but I was to shy to go and ask her. While I was thinking about how to get
her to be quiet a brainwave hit me!. If she won't be quiet I won't be quiet. I grabbed Mums portable radio and
headed to my secret tree hut. I squeezed through the gap to get in and headed by the treetops to Susans house.
By her house I turned my little radio on full - bore and sat there hoping she would hear it. After a while she
turned her stero off. I wanted revenge for her spoiling my sleep in the shade so I kept Mums little radio going.
I could tell that she heard the radio so I let out a big huge laugh. Seeing my job was done I went home with a
smile on my face.
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Subsequent pieces of writing – My Bike and The Possum
My Bike
Transcript of My Bike
Breathe in breath out.
At the top of the hill
I stand.
Mind ringing with fear.
I get on the bike.
Push off !!! dowwnnn !! Crash !!!.
Ouch !!.
Drag the bike back up the hill.
Again there I stand.
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The Possum
Transcript of The Possum
| Staring at the possum I was to shoot. Glaring at the gun I was to use. Holding the gun that seemed to weigh a ton. Dad holding the weight, me holding the trigger. Time flew past me in the form of a fly. I was speechless. I just aimed up the gun opened my eyes as wide as an owls. Then I pulled the trigger.
BOOM !!!. The bullets spread out ever wider as they neared the target. Fluff flying everywhere. Someone yelled,
"Fluff doesn't count".
The possum fell in a flurry. The dogs raced to meet it. When the possum hit the ground the dogs ripped it in two.
Again I was speechless.
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Jason's reflection
What I need to work on is paragraphs, inner monologue, punctuation, and figurative language.
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